MärvïN
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 |  Subject: Prologue and Chapter 1 (Tell me what you think and check for typos and errors please. Thank you.)  Sat Nov 28, 2009 2:50 am | |
| It is great, except needing a little polishing. Oh and remove "resistance was futile." that horse was beaten to death years ago.
Otherwise, Great first draft.
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| | Subject: Re: Prologue and Chapter 1 (Tell me what you think and check for typos and errors please. Thank you.) Sat Nov 28, 2009 12:17 pm | |
| - MärvïN wrote:
- It is great, except needing a little polishing. Oh and remove "resistance was futile." that horse was beaten to death years ago.
Otherwise, Great first draft.
I did this at 1 in the morning dude. One in the bloody morning. Lol. |
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